Short and interesting...
Unfortunately that's not enough in itself. Here's to hoping that your next episode will be a long one. (I'm talking about 10 minutes long, at that.)
Also, lol'd at the token black guy! Just what the heck man?
As others said, you have the talent and the voice cast. It just needs to be longer and more polished.
excellent
excellent graphic and animation
be carefull with the orthographs ('ealrier , pehraps'...)
I like it!
Congratulations! I like the animation, I like most of the voices, I especially like the soundtrack! Thank you so much for using my song, I really appreciate it :)
I hope our work can help your work in the future!
Love,
Timraband & Cuzone
pretty cool stuff
I have to agree with some of what the guys below me said about this. Let me start with the good parts though:
I liked your art style, i think it fits well with the kind of dark, melancholy atmosphere. i like how you draw the characters very realistically, thats something thats really missing on a lot of flash animations I've seen on Newgrounds. its like artists these days are either too lazy or don't have the skill to draw realistic characters so props for that. i liked the sketchiness of it too because i think it also fits with the type of atmosphere that you're trying to portray.
however i don't think the animation does the art style justice. if you're gonna make such a realistic movie, then the animation has to be pretty smooth. the part in the beginning where that guy with glowing eyes was walking towards the girl was kind of messed up. it was like he was just sliding from side to side instead of actually jerking from side to side.
also, the weakest thing about all this was the script and the voice acting. i really don't know which was more poor. the script either sounded out of place, too cheesy or it was forced like when she said that line about not fearing death but being afraid of life. the voice acting was pretty bad, especially for that black guy lol why don't you try actually getting a black guy to do the voice acting? and was the blonde guy supposed to have an English accent?
if you can improve on the script, the voice acting, and the fluidity of the animation this could be much much better.
great animation not soo much for writing
I really do enjoy the animation style and art. the combination of frame by frame drawings paired with some great atmospheric music really sets the tone of the plot(not so much the credit music but that could be from personal taste). My main problem with the animation is the writing/voice acting. Not saying the writing/voice acting is bad(having listened to some of the casts voice overs, which i much enjoyed), however i feel it could be better. Sometimes when watching the characters speak it doesn't seem like something that character would say within that situation. because of this some of the voice acting suffers. e.g the blonde guy with glasses - he doesn't seem to care about hellami yet he gives warning to her...something like..."You really plan on going in there yourself?"...or to fit with your follow up line from hellami..."You'd have to have some sort of deathwish going in there alone"...on the topic of the follow up line i didn't feel that meant anything, maybe to create a badass mystery girl, but it didn't make much sense to me "death isn't scare...life is"...ok? so why are you still living?
Problems aside from the writing I realllllyyyyy did enjoy the animation, art and movement style. In the future i hope that the delivery of the characters would be improved