Awesome, better then I cuold do!
The story line seems fine, but you should make the game longer. For example, the Megaman series. There's a longer story line to it. By the way, do you have any chance of knowing what kinda of game this is (Like every game has a specific genre or whatever. Like FPS are games that are games from a human's eye view. I'd like to know what kind of game this is called.