very good! :)
this is very good. keep up the good work! :D
Reviews for "Exile Preliminary 4"
pretty good
I actualy liked this Alot (mostly cause it has a plot many things dont but, I like Plot it makes things interesting) However some things Bothered me the First being when the 2 guys were fighting on the Forcelance The bomb that the green guy had strapped to the back of his vehicle Randomly Dissappeared untilll he threw it at the bad guy And 2 Was that in the very begining Some of the Animation qualtiy was poor. (ex was when the guy turned to run away from the ship and made the other guy drop his drink - I bet if i could slow it down his hand wouldnt knock the drink down like it looked like it was supposed to)
RiverJordan responds:
oh, no the two guy's actions were seperate from each other, one guy threw his can drink and ran, the other guy just stared in awe and he dropped the bottle :P
Thanks for the review though! :) I apologize for the disappearance of the bomb... i tried to have as little continuity problems as possible but apparently that's quite a big one .__.
This was done well
Looks like you put a ton of work in this animation and it shows. Just a few things I wanted to point out. The animation... I'll be honest, it was good for the most part, but It could have been done better(It's definitely getting better though). It was odd because the animation got a whole lot more detailed and smooth near the end like the oasis scene for example, it was great! would have been awesome if the whole flash was at that kind of detail.
The story is great, it has that combination of futuristic technology and swords, gotta love it, and the light hearted humor was an especially nice touch. Looks like things are starting to pick up, and the next episode soundsl like it'll be a great one.
Overall, an excellent piece of work, continue to improve, look at the minor flaws of this flash animation and use that knowledge to make your next piece even greater. Keep it up and I hope to see more from you in the future.
5/5
Nice you hit front page lol
Nice effort it made out to be quite the lengthy flash lol. Only thing I would look out for would be inconsistency in style and drawings. Some shots are a lot more detailed then others while others just have too much blank space. Do you story board your movies? That helps a lot with the composition side. I'd go into more detail but it looks like that Zhanli guy below me has already got it covered lol. Well no need for any more advice, your going to pick this all up from college anyways lol. Damn college is prolonging me from doing any work on flash haha
RiverJordan responds:
Dude i haven't seen you around campus in ages! .___.
Sweet dude
I've been waiting for this to come out! It rocks dude!
And for those who rate low like Zhanli who don't even have a single animation here on newgrounds they just don't understand the time and skill it takes to make what you have.
Love your work man. Looking forward to the next chapter.