fairly descent
i like how things had a nice feel to it; i would comment on the art, but I haven't attempted at animating anything other than sprites, so I got no xp on how hard it is to animate using the computer
Reviews for "Umichan Dark Winter"
Vortex00 responds:
thanks for the feedback
ah so your not dead :P
you really need to pick up the pace, it was like watching it in slow motion, i think you could have really speeded things up ALOT... some nice graphics and some understanding about the story... but its major downside is how long it takes to get through the story...
i think alot of people will comment on how slow it runs as well... i dont know if its just my computer but it felt like an age for things to get moving "story wise and animation".... athough there wasnt really that much of a story so far anway... looking forward to what else you do... but thats my major problem with it... "make it move quicker and smoother!"
Vortex00 responds:
Yeah I didn't test it out on different computers, so the animation might be laggy, I wouldn't know.
It's just not as faced paced as submissions normally submitted on here.. quick and to the point. I'm not trying to match them so much. Just doing my own thing, at the speed that I felt like it should have been.
I was trying get the viewer into the surroundings at the start.. dark, cold and silent, while watching, waiting and calculating from above.
I have a few things coming in January.
Thanks for the review. Yeah I'm not dead lulz >_>;
I'm not sure if it's my comp
but the scenes go a little slow, I have no idea what to rate it cause of that, so I'm giving it a seven, cause I think others might be having my problem, if you don't experince (or however you spell) please delete my comment so I can fix my rating
Vortex00 responds:
I don't get lag on my end =/
Good but could of been better
This flash had an interesting combination boons and banes.
First of all, character moved kind of clunky. To me the smoothness of any flash is important. If you could improve that, I think it would been a lot better. However on that same note I think you got the drift of snow down almost perfectly. The snow had a good feel to it.
Second, part of the animation was kind of smeared. A good example of this is the area around trees. It just doesn't feel realistic.
The lip sinking was another thing that I think could use some improvement. The way they moved their mouths, reminded me of a bad anime. However I also understand that the human mouth has been giving animators trouble forever. So this is kind of understandable.
Finally, I did like how the character was drawn. I can tell you have spent a lot of time drawing and perfecting the small details of this character. For that I say, good job!
Vortex00 responds:
Thanks for the feedback. I'll get better as I do more stuff like this.
Not bad
For your first "real attempt" at animation in only Flash, I'd have to say you did a pretty good job. As others have noted, the characters body movements and especially mouth movements were a bit off. However, other details such as the snow falling I thought were done very well.
The voice seemed very quite compared to the other sound effects. It might do some good to make it a little louder.
The ninja style running scene was amusing, which I don't think it was supposed to be.... I'm not sure if this was intentional or not, but she looked overweight in that particular scene compared to the rest of the Flash.
One thing that particularly bugged me was how close together her eyes were in some parts. It looked like her was squished or something.
Overall, this was a fine animation. Your art was very pretty and I can appreciate the effort that goes into Flash such as this.
Vortex00 responds:
Thanks, so now.. enough people have mentioned her being fat during the running part for me to actually care ><
i'll tweak the things you mention later on. or maybe apply it to another project.