Dear Christ No!
The art wasn't well done, the animation was crooked, and the story looked like it was thought up by a drunk leprechaun hopped up on pixie cocaine. Maybe you were trying to give the feeling of watching something beginning halfway in the story, but you didn't. Instead we get some dude screaming BS, with some demented chick saying BS, and some BS, and more BS. I'm not trying to be an asshole honest, it's just that I can't stand works like these getting submitted and ending up on front page.You should really consider thinking of a script before starting a project at least get someone you know to give you constructive criticism, and if you do ask a close friend tell them to be at least a bit harsh, doing this will really help the development and prevent this kind of quality flash from being submitted.