nah
Very corny. Mr.Bob accurately listed a few of the flaws and there are more. can understand your work being influenced by various aspects of the media but this is almost plagiarism. I know that's too harsh but if you look through the piece, apart from character designs what part of this can you say is fully original? definitely not the jokes, zombies done, fighting school kids done,a team of teenagers armed with various weapons done done done. this doesn't mean the whole thing is a bad idea, we advance by climbing on the shoulders of previous giants. My suggestion is remove the outdated gags and the tensionless fight scenes (no threat of death or defeat). if the fight scenes aren't meant to have the viewer on edge maybe finding another method of making them interesting aside from the comedic tendencies (those jokes were mostly crap) would do you well. Unfinished work should not really be submitted. I appreciate the piece and I understand you wanting to share it but Star Wars was not submitted with it's best fight scene replaced with an apology and I think that goes for most great titles, sorry about your pc but for me, that would have been a clear sign to start over. I'll disagree with bob about the voice acting though. It wasn't the acting that was bad so much as the script. If you can't find a decent script writer have a look at what makes other pieces great and try to incorporate some of the techniques (not style) into your work. This series has so much potential and as much as I dogged on it I watched it all the way through of my own will, so not all bad. Last note: I get the idea that your work draws a lot of influence from anime. If that's the case my biggest piece of advice would be WATCH SOME BETTER ANIME