Recap
Just read The-One-Banana He says it all.
Reviews for "Nintendo DSi "Promo""
i have a DSi and its good.
but this is as funny as all hell.
~Shabby
that was so funny
you spoke so much truth with that animation because i too know how it feels to have one of those babies. great story btw, you should make one about the nintendo shop lol ( if you know what i mean)! good music too, i have no complaints with this flash at all.
uhmm
no more please stand by screens
Minimal. lazy animation, but pretty good voices.
Personally, as a fan of the DS, I never really found the DSi to be worth my time.
But putting that aside... I'll start with the animation.
There's nothing really noteworthy in this category. In fact, the only real movement in here was of the mouth and maybe the occasional arm movement or blinking of the eyes. On top of that, the movements were choppier than desired. I'll give you points for the rotation of the opening character, but it was kind of rough nonetheless.
Artwork wasn't phenomenal, either. There was merely a white background, and a person standing (or sitting with a table for extra scenery... whoo). Though the characters look ok, I felt that a ton more detailing and shading would make the flash much more attractive; the current artwork is far too basic.
So we move on to the humor. While I found it moderately funny, it never really pulled more than a chuckle from me.
Now, there was an area where you excelled, and that was your choice in voice actor. Beautifully acted parts brimming with personality and high audio quality made the humorous "invisible parts" much more effective.
The music was also not bad. Calm ambient music; an excellent piece to accompany the flash. The climatic, louder part that started at the "Henry" scene kind of threw it off, though.
There are many ways you can improve this:
1) Animate the "invisible parts". The opening one that involved the violent PSP fan killing was appropriate, but once you used it for the other two parts, the flash felt really, really lazy. In fact, those parts take up a bit less then half the flash itself.
2) Put a bit more dedication in detailing. Some of the shading work is a bit rough and shoddy, the drawings of the people were a bit too basic to be a standalone object to watch. and the plain white background is uninteresting. Maybe put them in a room of some sort. Is the discussion taking place at a public area? Inside of their home? Add a bit more dedication to the flash's appearance!
3) The people are so... dead. Make body movements to accompany the emotions they express as they're bombarded with the oppressive narrator (ie, arm movement, eye movement, shrugging of shoulders). When the narrator at the beginning says "F*** you" at the beginning, the guy just stands there. Don't we normally react with a bit of anger or frustration, instead of just standing there with the same exact facial expression?
This flash really could have gone somewhere. If you had animated some of the invisible parts, the flash could have been more exciting and fun to watch. Take a bit of time to polish things up, and your flash will be more fun to watch.
TechFinch responds:
Thanks for your review. Your critiques are noted, and hopefully I can win you over with my next submission. =)