its so real man !!
the story, i almost want to believe it, great movie!!!
make a part two, i see potential for a series
Reviews for "Narrator's 2nd Love Story"
PostTimeskipSam responds:
There won't be a part two, but in the upcoming months. We will be saying our final goodbyes to the Narrator.
Improvements to be made.
I totally aggre with MysticShinHanKu. Everything seemed a little too forced and quite bland. I had to force myself to watch it all, hoping that you would sneak in something really funny but it never really happened - at least not for me.
Someone may have mentioned this already too but there were a few spelling mistakes in the subtitles. Have people proof read your work before you post it - I know how silly you can feel from silly spelling mistakes, trust me.
Keep at it though and well done for completing another project.
PostTimeskipSam responds:
Actually, I completely overlooked the spelling, I did proofread some of the subtitles, but when it started getting close to the release of the movie I stopped proofreading. I go through and fix all the bugs in my animation, but I need to go through and check for spelling. Thanks for your review
awezome
It was awesome and i liked the last one too.But WHEN u make more of narrators stories then try to make shorter loading cuz this one like loaded for 7minutes.10/10
PostTimeskipSam responds:
Actually, this movie was 9 minutes, but I cut it down to 7 minutes and I will. I'm going to try and use less dialogue and get the point across without dragging the movie in my next animations.
great plot
haha well written out story and all but your animation could use a little work,
7/10
PostTimeskipSam responds:
Thanks, I could have added animation movements when character talked and it would have improve the quality by alot. Thanks for the review!
A solid animation
not bad at all, but it needs a lot of work. The narrator was not very exciting at all. The bland story-telling made it very hard to stay interested in what he was saying. There was no real character so you didn't care if he got laid. He didn't seem like a smooth lady's man or a complete loser, just a normal dude.
there wasn't much of a storyline and no real plot twists or surprises or actual events. sorry to say but the whole thing probably could have been cut down to under a minute. The delivery of the actors was very unconvincing. It isn't for them to improve, it is more of a nudge to direct a little more. As far as comedy went, it was weak and needed a more structured story so you could really get into some punching jokes.
The art style was alright, but again, it sort of matched the bland narration, there was no real animation involved. The doodles on the wall at one point made me wish the whole thing was drawn like that with some more life and frame by frame instead of constant tweens and nothing but lip sync. When they turned and they swiveled, I really was a little turned off.
Overall, a good animation, fair performance, but needs more excitement and push. The script was the real fault in this though in my opinion. Good luck on your future animations.
PostTimeskipSam responds:
Thanks for the review, l appreciate the honesty; however Narrator is actually just a normal guy, but I see where your coming from. Looking over my script there was really just dialogue after dialogue with very little direction on what the voice actors/actresses needed to deliver, which is why character didn't feel like they were interacting with each other as much. I should added more voice direction in the script.
Anyways appreciate the constructive criticism, I'll keep these in mind.