Not Bad, for a First Flash!
There was quite a few good parts in there, which kept me entertained.
I would suggest making the screen bigger, because I had to put on my glasses on as well to read what the characters were saying. The text went awfully too fast in some areas that I couldn't finish reading them. So that should probably be fixed too, try timing the text to a point where you know that the viewer could have finished reading by then before moving to the next text.
Keep up the good work! ^.-