It's good, but...
...the boobs need to be bigger. Not only to resemble how Egoraptor draws her more, but also because you can never go wrong with big boobs. NEVER.
It's a simple formula, really. The bigger the boobs, the better.
Anyway, you actually put a lot of effort into this drawing, and it is in your own style, so I can't say much against it. Besides the boob size.