Hmmm...
While going through the list of dubstep songs and trying to fins something quality, I noticed this song. I listened to it, and I was hooked from the start of the song. The synths give it the perfect extra-terrestrial feeling to it, with a "floating in space" feeling from the background synths that reminded me of 2001: A Space Odyssey. A very well done piece, I thought.
Then the drop.
Sheer majesty, in the sounds and cuts from the foreground synths. The "this is not dubstep" part was perfect for the song, somehow. It all sounded wonderfully, harmonically... I'm not sure for the word here, "endless" maybe...
But... there's always a but, isn't there? This was about the point where I hit the vocals. And I'm not really going to lie here, it wasn't as good as the rest of the song.
One of the things that I've found a lot in songs, especially songs in general from the 90's, is that vocals can often kill an impressive song, no matter how well supported the song is by the instruments. In any song, the vocals always take the lead, and everything else takes the back seat at the time for most of the song. With a dubstep song, this is very hard to do, especially since the song needs to be focused on the sporadic instrumentals, and the voice can oftentimes be incorporated into the instruments. However, when it takes a lead, it can be interesting.
Unfortunately, this is one of those interesting times. I mean, quite frankly, the lyrics themselves are okay for the song. It would seem childish to me, though, and I wouldn't get that that's how it's supposed to be without it being explained to me up in the author comments. It's mainly in the voice of the song.
Now, nothing against you as a singer. This is the second song of yours that I've listened to, and I don't know how you do your music, so I'm not going to be the one to tell you how to write your music. I WILL, however, make suggestions here.
Frankly, you have a voice that reminds me of Eiffel 65, and I enjoy that. Being one of my favorite bands at one time or another (and not for just Blue; Johnny Gray, Silicon Girl, and Journey were brilliant as well), I can relate the singer to his music: A light techno sound that helps carry the voice while the voice carries the song. But hearing this mixed with Eiffel 65 isn't what I would picture them doing.
One of the other things I noticed in the song is that when you sing, there's another version of you singing at a higher pitch. However, the timing for both your voice and the other voice is a little bit off.
So, here's my thoughts:
1. You could very well remove the lyrics from the song. It wouldn't affect it much if you were to loop a synth with the same notes.
2. Potentially lower the pitch of either the foreground and background vocals, or just the foreground. I believe that with either more of a harmonizing between the instruments and the vocals would make it sound all the more excellent. Either this, or to make it so that the steep contrast aids the chaotic sounds of the dubstep by adding the vocals. This way, it can sound more like a part of the instruments instead of standing out all alone.
And the one I would highly recommend, 3. Rerecord the vocals so they match better. I know how difficult it can be to match one set of vocals with another in a song, especially getting them at the same time and being able to hear one over the other. This at the very least would make the vocals seem less sloppy sounding and make it a little more clean sounding.
Again, kudos for making an awesome bass beat. And no offense with the vocals, it's just an opinion.
And with that, adieu.
-straightjaketman