Ah, house
I gotta say, your groovy backgrounds and melodies are getting me more in to house every time I listen.
I can understand why you think this is rough sounding, but it only really is compared to your other songs. If I made this in any amount of time, I would be quite pleased with myself.
Love the little section at 2:07 that kind of pulls, then pushes the music forward. That's a drop, correct? Sorry, I don't work in this genre at all.
The chord progression is one of your better ones for sure; ear-pleasing! The side-chaining is not too heavy, not too light -- nice.
The hi-hat hits have a wispy and airy quality to them. This fits well in contrast to the much heavier bass.
The white noise building up and up towards the end (starts at about 6:00) is a good way to end the piece. This instrument releases very calmly, and works in conjunction with the extended delay from the plucking synth.
The best part about this tune is the addicting melody. It distracts me, in a way, from my usual complaint about house, which is the repetitiveness (sort of the definition of house though, isn't it? How would I know :p)
Great job; I can't find anything I don't like about this track, and I'm sure it'll only get better after your later revisions. I'm also impressed you did this in only 5 hours!
Keep up the good work!