You want helpful reviews? you got it partner.
first of all, it was clear that the grpahics weren't very good. I would suggest instead of pasting the pictures where you can see the background on them, to draw your own. If you become good at the artwork in Flash, then everything will look a lot better and cleaner. Next, would be of course your animation. What helps me is to do short animations in flash, and the just delete them. Stuff like things spinning, sticks figures dancing, lil things like that. It all adds up. Keep practing before you submit something else. It will pay off. and as for SethXv, you must be the "newb" cuz on NG its n00b. ya n00b. jk, but get it right!