not that good
the good bit was the zoomed in part, and i understand you wanting to move the entire person from 1 position to another (no induendo intended) without having to create frames in the intervining space, but you just have to do lots of frames, its just jerky without them. also if you want to get a good rating on something long like that, make a storyline, like a single dude who needs to rescue his wife from a tower will do, even though thats the worst oldest story line ever
what i suggest is a family who gets murdured by some mobsters then their brother goes in with a shotgun, dual pistols, dual uzis, a M4 a sniper rifle a chainsaw and a machetti to get revenge, hey he could be called bob and he could have super powers too!