Been a while since I heard something like this...
Honestly, I'm impressed. And very, very confused...
Normally, something as heavy as this would get annoying, or at the very least give me a headache. HOWEVER, you have pulled off a marvelous mix of the hard sounds of a true industrial song and a trance vibe, for lack of a better word.
Now, I WILL admit, there are some aspects about it that could be different. Personally, I think that the song goes from kickass to kind of suck to kickass to kind of suck very quickly. You have too much going on at one time in a lot of parts of the song, and it makes it sound messy. The parts where you keep it simpler sound so much better than when it's cluttered with noise. With the way that you were making the song, it needs to be calmer.
And then again, at the very end, there's ne real point to the noises that happen to fade it out. It just makes the ending messy, and takes the listener away from the hardcore experience that they were having during the rest of the song.
Then there were the parts in the middle of the song that were... eh...
This song would be a 9 or even a 10 in my book, ifonly the bad parts were located in one area for critiquing. However, because the bad parts are kinda shuffled into the deck with the rest of the good cards, it has to get lower.
Now, to comment on the good parts.
I enjoy very much many parts of the song, although it's hard to describe whih ones in text (otherwise, I'd be going "oh, the part where it goes DUN DUNDUN DUN DUUUUUUUN DUNDUNDUN DUN" all over the place)
As I said before, though, the best parts of the song are the simplest parts, with what you were trying to go for here. The begining was great, and right before the overly drawn out ending was awesome. There were random smatterings in the middle that were great. The tone was enjoyable, and even someoone who wasn't into the hard sounds of industrial could find this a pleasurable song. Overall, it was good.
And yet, at the same time...
I'm not entirely sure, to be honest! Keep up the good confusing work. 8 and 5
