ok...
first of all... do you know what's a pause? Really now... if you've gone the trouble of getting a narrator, he should at least pause sometime. it all went fast... everything, as if it was connected or somthing. stop every some time. wait a second or two... let the viewer understand better... instead it went on and on... it's a story. read it like you read a book, not like a robot.
some stuff don't even need narrating. for example: "the cat climbed on the tree because that's somthing that cats do". com'on! was that really neccessery?
another thing: when you make a movie, you don't need to tell us about how people look or what they were carrying. when the boy took his ladder with him you told us he carried a ladder, that he had boots and all along the movie there was a lirrle too much details.
another thing: it's a storytale. in storytales, and some of the lines were a "dissonant" to my ear, in that part, because they aren't fit for that kind of story (the cellphones, the gameboy, the price over the man's head). It's not realistic, so you don't need to use realistic material.
the whole story itself was a bit cliche, not to mention the animation, that didn't fit the backgrounds graphics.
you managed to create something nice, but below avarage, and you didn't present anything new. don't get hurt, but next time work harder on the movie and not on the script.