Hmmm.. needs improvement
first off... i dont really care about emos or jews or fat guys or any minorities... w/e so i dodnt rele care about the story... secondly, the song was too loud... you could barely here the sound...
1) get subtitles
2) edit your voices.
a. you can do this by using in flash
b. you can edit the volume and such...
other than the sound... your ok
peace.... well not rele