Work on the mix & originality
Pretty cool song.
Some points u need to work on:
0:18 the preset gate really kills the song for me. Presets are lame and cheap. Try to make your own synth & pattern in order to be more original and give the track more character.
0:46 the FL default snare is really recognizable and unoriginal . Try using another sample, or layer some. Also, try out some FX on the snare or hihats, like EQ, reverb or compressing.
The bass pattern was a blatant preset too. Don't just plainly use presets :/ Also try out some better patterns for that bass :/
1:43 The bridge (variation part) Imo it goes to fast into the chorus chords again. Try a chordchange or a longer monobass part.
The chords used in the refrain are the MOST common chords ever. In order to be original and get ur own style, try some other chords that are less cliched.
The overall is a tad too repeatitive, a change of chords in the bridge and shortening it a bit can fix this
The overall mix isn't too good imo. Make sure ur master volume doesnt go higher then 0 dB (check FL mixer channel). Also, make sure the individual instruments blend well together. You can make sure they do by equalizing them seperately .
I don't mean to be harsh, I'm just pointing out the technical flaws
I hope this helps and lets u improve :$
Cheers,
Kris