Not bad...
I'm not familiar with the original, but as a track of its own this needed more effects to use the kind of haunting tone it's going for. It needed some fading and sweeping, especially on that noisy pad you had going. Anyways, it's not a badly put together track, on the whole. But there's clearly some room for improvement. One more thing: you need to work on the lvl's for your synths, they can't ALL be the loudest part of the loop at the same time. Give each of them their moment to shine and it'll come out a bit longer and bit less crowded.
3/5
7/10