Japanese needs improving
Briliant animation, although your Japanese needs improving. Your pronunciation was WAY off on some things; even to the point that you said "dekOOnai" instead of "dekInai" at one point.
You also wrote "ashita" for 'the next day'. Unless you literally mean that that event happened tomorrow - like, the 12th of September 2005 for example, then you should have written "yokujitsu" (翌日). This means "the following day" and is probably what you actually wanted to say.
Don't give up on your Japanese - you'll get there eventually. Superb flash though - no complaints with that at all! (^_')b