Not Bad
You took hits on style because you are quite obviously using the South Park method. Sad story, allot of hard work too, so it's good, but uh if i had to say one thing about it, it would be lighten up a little, you can maintain the meaning but put some comic relief or something, you'd get better reviews,
PS. And to everyone who's going to (and there will be many of you) assume that this is a self portrait by the artist I suggest you try knowing what your talking about before you start hating.