lol i pretty much agree with killstrom :D
i think the bass needs to be just a little louder, and then add some sort of pad in the background to harmonize with the rest of the song(if there was, then i guess i couldn't hear)--that's what made the song just a little empty. it would add more feel to it.
however, the song was good itself--it definitely has the same style as Paradise on E .. so anyone could tell this is your song =D
[i just realized this was made 3 years ago :O]