Gave you a tenner cuz I don't wan any flaming. ;)
Pros :
+ It isn't a bad idea for a story.
+ Uhmm something...
Cons:
-The kitchen furniture made it feel like a one story, mile high building because the floor wasn't showing and the chair & table legs were quite... Tall... :P
-You might have had a lot of effort making it but sadly it isn't showing a lot..
-It was quite short even for a... What is it called again... Nvm I'm Finnish anyway. :)
-Oh my ears. I surely didn't like the music. But that's only a half con. Someone else might have liked it...
Over all it was very good if it was your first :P I'd suggest putting more effort when drawing the backgrounds and a little shading here and there doesn't hurt (I have blurry eyes so make it strong shading).
I can't help myself laughing when I think it was you making the vocal part :) It was your little sister, right?
This will make me not to submit any flashes on NG in fear of you tormenting me to the lowest Hell.. :D
ps. DW has a big nose and a furry hat (don't tell him I told you) :F