Wow so much work needed.
I understand this is for your girlfriend and she would proabbly like something like this. But seriously this was just werid, first off the so called "character" looked horrible, it was smooth and everything but the neck was like an inch thick and the head was 5 feet in diameter. Also the majority of this was just fading text on a blank black and white screen with dramatic music.
OMG FRONT PAGE!!111
It's ok but it doesn't derserve the attention it's getting.