Consistency in Style and Character Needed
Your idea is for a short ... but this is too short. It was even shorter than the first, which was better. The first "Failed Suicide Short" featured what looked to me to be a husky teen boy ... this is a female, I guess. Why not be consistent in length and character? The timing of sound effects and the music bit is your strongest suit. Glad you avoided the ADD / ADHD reference in your comments this time, but don't you think it would be best if you didn't need to explain the humor?