Not bad at all...
This is probably the best animation first I've ever seen... You've got talent. Keep on doing what you're doing, never stop learning, and keep challenging yourself. I look forward to much better stuff than this in the future from you.
Very kind words, hope you know how much I appreciate your feedback. Thanks a lot.
3 hours, eh?
You did bloody well after having flash for 3 hours. Practice and you will be great.
Thanks :) Il cram as much practice in as I can, hope to see you at my next entry :p
3.5
The fact that this was done in your initial stages of learning how to use Flash is one reason to give you a little slack, but the reason for submitting this is something I just do not understand. While I am sure that you spent some time on this, it is just not in your best interest to showcase you ability yet. Work on smoothing out the actions, it just seemed super choppy, as well as possibly adding sounds to give some more life to the story. It shows promise, good luck in your future work.
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I always apreciate some constructive critisism, but this one confuses me a little. First the animation, while it is a long long way off perfect, and after reviewing it myself over and over im slightly stumped as to how you came to the conclusion it was choppy. Some sections are a little jumpy, but maybe you suffered a temporary loss in RAM? As for sounds, granted they were lacking, but they where there and while there wasnt a great range they were well timed and pretty suiting imo.
Anyway, thanks for feedback.
Better than most
For a first attempt this is definatly at a higher level than most. You've obviously tried to make something coherant and sensible and it actually comes across as really pretty damn funny. I can see you're also emulating some pretty skilled techniques for animating and you pulled it off well. I guess this is just a sign that in the future you will be a damn fine flash artist. If your submitions are witty and have a story like this then keep em comming.
Thanks, I have plans for a whole bunch of different flashes just as soon as I become more comfirtable in flash. For now im quite content making more along the lines of this one, one things for sure, they arnt getting any worse :)
Lyon'os
just four words can explain what i have just experienced and they are: DEAD GOOD WELL ACE!
Now here is a real honor, Jai'os himself! Glad you like it matey, your well ace!11one