I only have 2 complaints..
1. He ran like he was a gimp.
2. The mexican (or whatever he was) guy would of shot him the second he had him... seriously, would you stand there with your gun pointed to the guy that just slaughtered about 20 of your men?
lol thats funny
Very good
PLEASE CHECK YOUR SPELLING BEFORE SUBMITTING...Killing has 2 L's for instance...Not to be like strong bad or anything...
You could make it better with voices...it dragged on having to read all the time.
Well
You got some real potential, just keep practicing. I was just alittle confused by the storyline thats all. But Good Effort! 7/10
well
saw alot of spelling mistakes like "for ever"... and you've got talent but you got to spend the time detailing the charecters, other than that i liked it alot you get a 4/5
right...
well it was ok i guess, but yeah...he pretty much says guns are dumb and he slays what, 5 people in the beginning with a handgun? right...uhmm....and at the end..."I will find you brother...we will reunite...into one soul..." Is he gonna like, bum rape him or something, i dunno...just sounded kinda gay to me. nice flash though