I agree with Maverik
He may have been a bit harsh but he was rigth on most points, and like liam-speed mentioned, it sounds like you're doing the "whisper talk" in the chorus, there's just no 'boom' of power like there should. Over at 1:39-1:52 you did very well but it still missed a tiny bit of energy bit. Also near the end of the song where you do the 'gasps' and the like, it just sounds like you're reading somebody else's lyrics, or singing along with a song, just not very enthusiastic or at the proper mood
At any rate, it was good, but not quite great. And you guys can go ahead and say my comment isn't helpful because I don't think this song is fantastic, it's cool, I understand