Very good
I have never made a flash before but i suspect there is a lot of work involved. For the most part i like it. It was a very interesting first chapter and was a good hook to leave people off on, will he die or will he see it and save him self in time. Yes i agree at some points it does kind of go a little fast and hard to keep up with the action but i kept up with it and i see how some people could say that. For your first flash i think you did great good job and i cant wait for the next chapter