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Reviews for "Zombie Child [short]"
Im sorry,
Hi, JB_cubed2
It's time for your daily dosis constructive critisism!
At the beginning of the loading screen i noticed that u tried to create some form of plot. Although it was pretty poor, with weird grammar, it still managed to get me into the mood of the animation a little bit.
The first big flaw of this movie is its size. Cmon, 4,5 megs for 30 seconds of animation? Compress the song next time with a program, optimize the curves and im sure it will be all lowered to about 2,5...
The next thing i noticed was that u didnt center the backgrounds perfectly, leaving a white line on the left side of the flash. Kinda annoying, although not extremely unforgivable.
Another weak point in my eyes was the speed of the flash. It went all a little bit too slow. Try to fasten it up a little bit with more different scenes. It will make the action come across much smoother!
I saw u had some problems with the perspective too. In the scene where the guy was flying up, the trees were still front view. Just like the uncentered backgrounds, this gives the flash that little amateuristic atmosphere.
The music was average, although the animation seriously lacked soundeffects. I know u didnt use them because of the filesize, but that still isnt an excuse.. If u compressed things a little bit more, it would have been smaller AND with sounds!
I also think some voices would do the flash really good....
And last but not least, the entire thing was way too short... It basically was a small fighting scene. For something like this a plot wasnt even nescesairy. All these little things together, made it kind of unpleasant for me to watch. Work on it on the next animation and put some more details in it. Im sure it will be much better next time, because the art was pretty cool! However good art is only a fraction of what makes a good animation...Still it seemd to be enough for the viewers to give u a very good score. Take care!
jb-cubed3 responds:
Hi AloneInTheDark,
Thanks for taking the time to produce your constructive criticism, I'll take that on board with future movies.
I know whilst graphically its quite strong I know where you're coming from regarding size and sound details. It's odd, becuase without the sound it still amounts to 4MB+ and the size is compressed also, which is quite strange.
Regardless, thanks again for taking the time to watch and really review my submission in depth.
All the best,
~ jb :)
Too Short
sorry, you did an ok job, it was just too short to be an good. Put a little more time and effort into it and im sure you could make a good flash.
Ninja South Park?
...Be still my beating heart. I really don't think this kind of DBZ inspired dreg could get any more tired. An almost comically cartoonish goth kid with a sword fights something at random. There are fireballs and explosions and it ends.
Technically, you're very skilled. the movements are smooth and some of the "light effects" are original, but this was pointless. There were no sound effects. The techno track you chose is subpar and doesn't highlight the events on the screen. (like, a big noise when someone is hit) As if you did the movie then stuck it on as an afterthought.
It's a good effort, but it really isn't entertaining. This stuff is all over newgrounds already. What you really need is an edge.
jb-cubed3 responds:
Hi TheButler,
Your comment in itself couldn't get any more tired. Thanks for your score anyway; 3/10. Lovely.
~ jb :)
"he's still leaving, breathing and angry"
please double check your work, makes it look amatuerish from the start.
jb-cubed3 responds:
Hi, loopster22,
Thanks. I'll ensure that in future. :)
~ jb