*tear drops*
that touched me ...more than michael Jackson *sniff*
Reviews for "As The World Ends..."
Wanion responds:
Really? I heard hes VERRRRY touching... teehee.
Good Job
But where is the nipple slicing? I didn't see any nipple slicing so that brought you down. J/K keep up the good work.
Wanion responds:
Haha! Everybody just loves that scene in NEFARIOUS, don't they?
Wow
very deep, very moving, very good, keep it up.
Wanion responds:
And a very big thanks to you, too!
beautiful
man that. kinda touched my heart. i know im bein mushy and shit but, dude that really had a great affect on me.
Wanion responds:
Don't feel bad, it was meant to be like that. Thanks for enjoying it.
Had something then blew it away
This premise had potential. When you got to the "in a rowboat" area, I was getting really interested. I wanted to see which way you would take this. You could have had a focus on a personal struggle. You could have shown the struggle of the world and the alienation of that person in the rowboat. There were so many ways you could have taken this but you decided to go with aliens blowing up the planet and insinuating they were at war by looking up the definition on a grammatically incorrect computer.
"None or mass death is involved." How about saying "Death may or may not be involved." You could have also tried using an actual dictionary for the definition. That would have made this seem more believeable. I mean, a race of creatures with space travel looking up a definition of a word after they've blown up a planet? C'mon! At this point, you destroyed my interest because you went the easy route.
Wanion responds:
The aliens didn't blow up the world, if you noticed in the beginning the hand was white, not green... the aliens were ashamed of what happened and never knew of it before, thus looking up the world "war", and who gives a shit what the answer was for it.