You tried, you really did..
Good graphics, song was okay, but for what you were doing, the message was lame. You were blatant with what happened all of a sudden and that just threw it off the good wagon to me. Due to the first parts of the movie, I thought this would be a symbolic movie, but it's not. It's really cheesy from my point of view. Don't view the audience as stupid- the good viewers really aren't. Be subtle. You could have made that whole movie without a word on the screen and it would have been 8 times better.