my review...
I just had a preview of your other stuff to see where you've come from and know you've had some time with FL. Some of your stuff is quite impressive compared to how long you were doing it for, but others I'll just say are good "building blocks."
What I would do to this song:
take out the whole hard dance thing, or take out the whole soft part of the song. I mean, it's nice to variate, but it seems like you are putting way too much into this song. Also, the whole soft side to the song could turn into a great trance track, which is more down my alley of expertise, one could say, but I"m not the best one to tell you how to approach this kind of genre, if there could be a labeled genre, like you say above.
Also, the end part of the song kinda seems abrupt and sounds like you just didn't know how to expand this song and kinda just left it off and kept it as a "song."
So, the things that I'd do if you really want the most out of this track:
- Split the hard stuff and the softer stuff into two different tracks. You should then have progressive trance and hard dance. Play with that and see where it takes you both ways, both may get top 5, this one did...
- See about the beginning area. I felt that the distorted instrument in the intro was a bit random and caught me off guard. I wasn't at all expecting it and sorta put me off.
- Make both songs smoother. You don't have to make everything for the ADD impaired. It's nice to have that kind of music, but other people have time to listen to music and kinda take it all in.
- The ending had no apparent path to it, and ended a bit awkward. I felt that you could have expanded on that and made it a bit smoother, kinda like sanding those little details of the almost-finished product.
I've noticed in your review responses that you put two weeks on this. I've personally done songs like that and sometimes the longer you put into a song can actually ruin it. From my personal experience, it definitely helps in almost all situations, but some others it doesn't and just twists your plans for the track.
Keep making music, and I look forward to hearing your stuff in the future.
Derrick
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