Disjointed.
You're really good at the whole "creepy atmoshpere" thing... I enjoy your stuff a lot. This one builds tension really well...
Unfortunately, this not your best artwork ("Coffee % Wicked" had better stuff in it). The characters kind of resemble tall South Park kids. The song choice was strange (Edward Scissorhands), and had kind of the same out-of place feel as using the Nightmare Before Christmas music in your "Darkness makabre."
Really, I think the biggest problem is that this one doesn't go anywhere... it seems like this is just the BEGINNING of a story... that stops just when it's getting going.
So far, I think "Darkness makabre" is your best submission... it had good graphics, good plot, excellent resolution.
I am still looking forward to more submissions, though... keep 'em coming!