It's good for your approach, but...
I'd think of an Oblivion theme remix as being more instrumental. More of a attemp to beutify the approach already used. Still for what you're going for there's not much better you could do. The beginning's too fast:i think you should've made it abot half that fast since then it'd have more flesh to it and it'd still be quite fast, and at the end it'd be a lot better if you could figure out a way to smooth the looping. Still a solid 8 or so.