neat?
it was good but I think the next movie should have human voices because the techno voice doesnt express any emotion
Reviews for "PEN! enter the clock"
Terrible...
but since we chose who survives, let SBC win.
Jeanzy responds:
terrible ? ur a wanker.. u do better then review me again.
Dumb! =D
First. Get Speakonia (google search for it) and use IT for the voices, because whatever you used totally messed up ALL the inflections, and didn't have nearly enough versatility. Not that your writing was particularly ingenious anyway. It's too late now, but the kid and PEN should not have had clock voices, as they are not clocks. Kids are human, they should have human voices. I find it terribly hard to believe that you would have had a hard time tracking down a person with a microphone to utter a single scream.
Second. Music. You need it. A little ambience here and there would have made this several points better.
Third. Writing. You need to make it better. "Ooh, I'll hide behind the bed! That's fucking GENIUS! I'm all like MacGyver and shit!" No, you're like the retarded kid who thinks that because he closes his eyes that you can't see him. Tension buildup is not NEARLY as effective when the obstacles are so easily surmounted.
Fourth. Pacing. Why did it take so long for the two clocks on the 7th floor to finish talking? It's not like what they were saying was important. Prioritize--are you here to tell lame one-liners that everyone's heard before? Or are you here to make a flash about kicking ass?
Fifth. Character depth. Strawberry clock is an imbecile. While it could be argued that he still is an imbecile in this flash because he knew that PEN was coming and still did not implement proper measures to stop him, I certainly doubt you thought that far, and tried to portray him as a strategic mastermind. It'd be nice to have an inkling (pun not intended) as to the reason for PEN's imprisonment, as well. Write up some background, give the characters personalities. Then it will be an enjoyable flash.
Meh
It wasnt all that great. besides the voices really sucking, they were too similar, it was hard to distinguish one from another. also, a pineapple has spikey leaves, not feathery ones. it was pretty boring.
good
a lil boring tho i dint laugh at the violence ( i usually do) anyways the graphics and sound owned