Pretty cool man
Overall it's a good job, but the drums could use a bit of work. I also don't think you had too many cymbal crashes. I just think you used them the same way too many times. If you could have come up with variations I think they'd have sounded a lot better. Like if you had added some eighth note cymbals that switched between a couple of crashes, or had done some more rhythmic cymbal work. If I'm not too clear with what I mean, try listening to Mike Portnoy drum. He uses crashes, splashes, and any other cymbal you'd ever want really well. As for the rest of the tune I can't really complain.
I can't wait to hear some new tunes from you man.