Its well made but...
I think the percussion was very VERY poor, you repeated the same bongo pattern almost all over the song, another thing I do noticed is that the climax was very weak, it builds up really nicely, but then it sounds like something is missing...
Im sorry but I cannot give u a 10/10 for this, I will give you an 8/10 just because it seems that you put lots of effort into it, and so Im going to 5 it, so don't worry ; )