Nice, but
The real problem I ahve with this song is that the melody didn't keep time with the beat. It made it sound quite messy in places, as the fluctuations in the melody were sporadic and quite abstract.
If you'd performed the melody as a piece without the backing track, it would be great as a random abstract piece. Mixed together, it just sounds like it's been thrown together, while in places, it is quite a nice form of music.
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