Has a little more to live up to.
While you transcribed the melody very well, this remix did not fit my tastes. Mainly, it did not carry that epic feeling that the original possessed. Another aspect I did not like was the lack of flow. All the beats in this song are short and punctuated. Not of them, except the bass, are extended. This makes the song sound a little too choppy, which isn't really a great feel.
I don't want to give the impression that I think this is a bad song. Only those two points about it stuck out. Aside, it's great.