Nice potential
Interesting. I really like your visuals and animatino style. Granted this is your first flash and there is a lot of jottyness to be found, the style in which you animate and draw shows that your the kind of author that definitely goes on to pregress really well; kinda like Joe Blanchette, just look at his first work. Your audio, though a great touch, needs some work. The voice acting might need a tad bit more emphesis on emotion and character change. I've done voice acting before, so I too know how weird it can be to say weird things in a mic, but it really helps if done right. Another thing with the audio was that the timing was a little off. Like after someone said something, there would be a noticable pause in the flow the the cartoon. Try to get rid of those pauses, it'll really help the flow of the movie. The plot was somewhat interesting as well, the only thing I can really suggest is throwing in some more surprises, but for the most part, it seems like you really know what you want. Keep up the good work, you show lots of potential.