OTT on the bass, don't you think?
Poor quality of the speech and way too much bass holds this one back. What I could make of the story seemed fun, soundtrack was well chosen, and it was all nicely animated. Could have been a bit longer too, seemed to tail off a bit. Try to test animations on people who don't know the script before submitting them so things like poor audio mixing can be dealt with. Other than that, keep up the good work.