Perfect concept, almost perfect execution
You have my 5 and 9 (since it's a great song, but there's room for perfection).
My nitpicks/suggestions:
- Check the vocal pitch at 1:05 and 1:08. It seems off to me.
- At 3:01, the drums didn't jive to the vocalist (to Tamar). It felt kinda awkward.
- The vocal loudness isn't consistent. It is sometimes soft, and sometimes loud. The difference is about 2dB. If you can't ask Tamar to re-record the vocals, try adding more compression on your vocal track. You may also want to play with the EQ and reverb.
- Lyrics are sad, but suits the melodies of the song. Kudos!
- You have this background noise that resembles playing a vinyl. I'll just think it's your style. It kinda works anyway.
Overall, it's a good track to chill out to. Good job! ^_^