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My first attempt at animation using someone elses account(mine was not working). It's a short animation where the protagonist is framed for murder and arrested.
For the type of genre this animation had, the music felt unfitting. Most of the time in scenes like this, no music is played or dark, quiet music that doesn't get in the way is played to convey tension. Also, the music sometimes stopped and resumed instead of playing smoothly as if it was in installments or something. I noticed this only happens when there are different camera angles, so if you ever write anything that calls for lots of camera angles, your audio is screwed.
There was no voice acting. Lack of voicing is a problem if you're trying to create an enthralling story. Even if you aren't a good voice actor, there are tons of good voice actors who have actually formed communities to provide voices for animations like this, such as the Voice Acting Club or voiceacting.proboards.com.
Usually, without voice acting, lip syncing won't be a problem because any significant off-timed mouth movements would be overlooked considering the focus is on the speech bubble. Though this was just one mouth drawing overlapped over a closed mouth repeatedly.
Although the characters didn't look very good, some shots like the shot of the city were well-animated and actually looked pretty good.
>although the characters didn't look very good
which brings me to my next point: the characters. their anatomy is strange, really and their facial expressions hardly ever change. sometimes the characters aren't even making eye contact with other characers, such as right in the beginning and their faces look super-generic.
and that camera angle with the two men when he says "No prints or DNA were found," is just basically messed up like the camera is going all over the place.
so 3/5 for potential
Thanks, The audio was only thrown In at last minute to meet the marking criteria. Without trying to make too many excuses this was put together on a very short time scale. Thank you very much for the review, it's made my evaluation one hell of a lot easier.
needs a little backstory
Thanks for the rating. The animation is one part of my groups animation but I haven't had a chance to upload the other parts . If you could please comment on what you thought of the animation or graphics used in the animation it would be really useful to my coursework. Thanks.
good movie. needs to be made into a series and future vids need to be longer cause thet was very short also why does it just keep playind stop the vid when it ends and add a replay button its very annoying when vids do that
Thanks for the comment. I had issues with exporting the animation in ToonBoom and ran out of time to fix any bugs. Could you please comment on what you thought of the graphic and animation, it would be really useful for future projects. Thanks
I use toon boom too, toon boom animate 2. Nice Work :P
Cheers for the feedback. we were using ToonBoom studio 5.0, can't say i'm a fan of it. could you possibly comment on the graphics used or anything? It would be really useful. Thanks
Feeling sorry for yourself doesn't get you anywhere...
First episode: Trolls attack the village and heroes come to defend it.
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