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I've been a member of Newgrounds for 5 years. Finally, now that I've gained a little knowledge, I present my 1st flash cartoon.
Literally the best flash I've seen all day
It was quite enjoyable; short, sweet, and to the point. I can't wait to see what your future career hold. Just try to get some sound in there and you're good to go!
The potential is there
Just make the movie longer and try to develop a decent storyline next time.
ha! yeah I know. I've never used flash before, it was an assignment for school. This was done in 2 hours and most of that was tying to get the buttons to work.
This shouldn't have been submitted, really. Your artwork isn't that good, but don't let that stop you. I've seen great movies with crappy/simplistic artwork before (Dad's Home comes to mind). The key thing here is there's no point to the short. If you have a story to tell, tell it! But put effort into it, draw it as best you can, add a replay function, and definitely add some sound, even if it's just music. This particular film has almost no merit, but that's no reason you shouldn't submit another one. Just put in the time to make your next one worth watching!
Shouldn't have been submitted? That's a terribly hurtful thing to say. When get around to your first upload I hope no one is tha mean to you.
Needs major improvement
This movie was just bad.
To start off with, the purpose of the movie was just stupid. I giant monster eating a human? How many times has that been seen. Try something different, that idea is so overused now that it is becoming boring.
Second, where is the music and sound? If you were using a flash player you must have some way to import sounds files. Try adding something to keep people engaged in a video.
Third, No replay button...moving on.
Four, the art in this was just....eh...bad. It was not appealing to look at, not one bit. I'm not trying to be harsh on your drawing ability but not everyone has the skill to do that. Trying using sprites or something already pre-drawn that you can animate.
Since this was your first flash, I'd say give it another shot; I'm not sure how much this will help you but I hope that it can guide you to a better flash video.
I'm sorry I couldn't please you. Maybe next time...
THE TRUE SHORT COMETH!!!
Now this... THIS IS A SHORT!
We get a silly even that blasts by without any chance to think! No explanation, just a random burst of dino gore and that's the end! You can pause it and rewind if you are fast enough!
What's more, you skipped that horrifically stupid cliche of making tons of credits that go to the same person! I HATE THAT! Instead, the short sweetness continues with a blink and you miss it single scroll!
You also get bonus points for being named Stephen, like Dr. King, HAW-King, and Boles (you never heard of him).
This is the new red letter B! Stop the first page! Sound the trumpets! The new king of the portal has arrived!!!
Good effort for a first film, btw. ;)
Ha! WAY too much praise, but I'll accept it. Thanks a lot, you made my day.
The story of a lazy kid and the people who live at his place. Sometimes stuff happens.
The animated adventures of a small, pencil-drawn man.
A series based on the classic NES game, Kid Icarus!
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