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Sorry for the lack of sound, I'm out of town and I cant record, I'll re-upload it later.
Wow....there was a lot of stuff.
What a MEGApiece of animation effort.
Not much to say because there isn't sound at the moment.
Purely looking at the animation, there is some pretty wicked scenes of him kicking another person. There are some not so smooth scenes of people bouncing along strangely....also the movie moves very quickly and I didn't have a context of the area. Haha I love the woman waving him off....I could hear the music in my head for that one, just that really sad yet hopeful japanese flute and stringed instruments.
- The story is a little confusing, because the whole animation runs too quickly. This is a good thing, because now you can go over it again and pause some of the action to take in the scene, also once the sound is in....it should help the story a little bit more.
- the colours are vibrant and colourful...and detailed in a lot of places.
- the animation needs a little fine tuning in some areas and is completely OKAY in others.
- stay more consistant with the art style as well, a little jarring going from amazing oriental loook....to a weird DAD's HOME style. If you are trying for the anime look, which has the over the top chibi characters in scenes....remember they have the lesser looking artwork when people are thinking something, or to add extra humour on the odd occassion...I felt the change of art style didn't suite with your painstakingly drawn pictures.
Sound added and I will watch again :)
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It's hard to understand
There's no real flow it things, maybe it will make more sense with the sound? There's a lot of scene jumping and what looks like random/pointless scenes.
Why upload it now then?
Why dump this on us now, when it is almost completely incomprehensible?
It has good material- images, such as the first images with the crysanth in hand etc., then the opening eyes. Good art, good animation but pointless until backed by proper sounds or some way of explaining what is going on.
Come back with the update soon; I look forward to it, but I don't appreciate this being submitted unfinished.
The animation and effects are extremely well-done for the most part. I would add more sound (I understand no one's supposed to be talking. You could add music and effects, maybe even have the characters "grunt" to give us a better idea of their emotions, etc.) and keep it off a loop; have some sort of title page with a play button and a replay button at the end.
This could be a great flash if you work out the kinks. Keep it up!
A short film about a park bench
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