hmmm
5 stars for hilarity, 1 star for using music from twisted metal, and 1 more for a good moral....but how does a black guy killing a white guy end racism? (: that's ok. it's rhetorical.
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Black father takes a walk and ends up with an unlikely encounter of a white racist guy, leading to a duel battle, putting an end to racism
I don't know what to say...
While your intentions are good, you should think of a better way to express them. Having a fight scene where the black guy wins and the white guy looks like an autistic Harry Potter freak... yeah.
You could also fix some mistakes you have in English. And please, less headbutting. XD
I can't really do anything, but that still doesn't mean what you did is great. It's good, but it really needs to improve.