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The Muse is a coffee shop in town. The owner was contacted for an opportunity to have students submit work for his store. This is a piece I did for one of the assignments.
The idea is that the coffee can be tasty anywhere. It was to be creative, and inspiring. Let me know what you guys think.
i love the andy mckee
For those wondering, the song is "For My Father" by Andy McKee. The fact that this song is in your video increased its score in my eyes ha ha.
Stylistically, I love where you are going with it. Only a couple things that I believe would improve upon it:
Firstly, the tropical setting. I assume the little explosion is supposed to be fireworks? Maybe I'm wrong but I think it needs to be clearer as to what it is, confusion initially arose once I saw it.
Secondly, "inspiration in every cup" is a good slogan, but it doesn't seem to have any correlation to anything you've established in your video. I mean, you show that coffee from The Muse is great in any location, but how does that indicate that there is inspiration in every cup? Elaboration would be good, or perhaps a change in the slogan?
The only other problem I saw was technical - the play again button only replays the very end of the movie when the cup is turned to display the establishment's name, instead of replaying the entire video.
Otherwise, I think you stylistically nailed it. It's humble, artistically simple and a great idea. Good luck with the assignment, and great job!
Wow, thanks a lot for the informative review. Also I did some last minute adjustments and I guess I glitched that "Play Again" button. Thanks a lot for your input. I'll be sure to put your critiques into consideration.
(By the way, that explosion is supposed to a a "flower" but I guess it was a bit of a fail right? :-P )
Nice and soothing
This could make a really good commercial. You have some real talent.
My only complaint is that you didn't put in a pre-loader, but that is not too important because the flash doesn't take too long to load.
Overall, good job. Very nice.
I like it!
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