needs more
there was no story at all. even though your animation is newb, you still need to have more the whole of the animation.
Author Comments
Alright, my first TRUE animated flash. Took time, patience, sweat (well, actually my computer is in a very cold room, so never mind), and thought. Pieces drawn in Fireworks, and animated in flash. I did not make the sounds. The raptor noises are from Jurassic Park, the gun shot from Carnivores 2, and the voice acting is mine.
Story: A man is trapped in a warehouse, and is confronted by a dinosaur. He has a gun. Not too much story actually, but I hope to continue this story with better flash, and explain the story.
Hope you like, its a first!
Was okay for a first
It wasn't great, but it wasn't bad either. Sounds were on cue it seemed, hopefully your animation can improve over time, since you've just gotten started. The voice acting was good as well. Keep at it and good luck!
Clonehunter responds:
Thanks for the feedback. I'm actually surprised this hasn't been blammed yet, but I guess thats also a good thing...