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Oct 13, 2009 | 7:33 AM EDT

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First animation to try out,hope you enjoy please do leave constructive crit would be appreciated to improve and make better movies.

Dealing with the sudden death of his loved one is what it basically is.

Reviews


Chippy22Chippy22

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars October 13, 2009

Thank you!

I gave you a 4 out of 5 for this. Although there were a few instances where your animation was questionable (mainly when one of his arms detaches itself), i thought your artwork was great for a first animation. There are too many people that submit pieces of absolute rubbish and defend it buy saying its their first animation, but this actually had some quality, that could be easily improved with some more animation practice (although, if you practice with random shapes, please don't upload it). Your choice of sound track was excellent and matched the narrative of the piece really well. I would recommend learning some basic (i say basic, i never grasped how to do it really, ha!) scripting to stop the sound track when the animation finishes, as i am still listening to it while writing this.

Overal 4/5, 7/10 and actually favourited!



Bagger-DudeBagger-Dude

Rated 2 / 5 stars October 13, 2009

can not do this alone

your artwork is very generic, but as a contradiction to that, has some interesting sides to it. The manga style, lose it and be creative, however, the general tone that the artwork gave was very well done due to some clever shading, but i cant quite put my finger on it.
However, the animation was terribad. You can draw bearable art, and your storyline is fairly above average (not that that means anything tho) but your way of putting it together is bad. And the song didn't stop at the end of the animation; the programing was lacking.

as for the sound, the song was indeed all that was required here. There was obv no need for Sound effects or speech. However i do believe that the climax of the song could be timed better, but that might just be me.

All in all, you, like most people, have potential, but you must know that you are not an animator if u can draw. Do everything in FBF or find another person to help you animate.